I think this is pretty good and I like the message, BUT--the one thing I would change is the repeated use of the word air. To me it feels a little redundant.."air, air, midAIR,.." so just try to change it up a little bit.
this is a very good poem because when i first interpreted it i viewed it in alot of differenmt ways. is somebody hanggliding? on a plane? jumping off a building to commit suicide (probably not that but stil..) or maybe somebody died and is going up to heaven? great poems make people wonder what thje meaning of the poem is.
Wow, I really like this poem because it had a very good theme! In the poem it says, "No way to stop myself, it's too late. The ground comes to view, and appears underneath me. It was there the whole time". I think what you are trying to say with this piece, especially with the last line, is that sometime we may feel like everything is moving too fast, and we are just in free-fall, when really there will always be something to catch us if we look hard enough. Therefore, I liked this piece because it had a theme, which many poems written by our peers lack.
I really liked this poem! Like Rockelle said, this could mean a variety of different things. When I first read it, I thought it was someone jumping off of something and regretting it. For example, you said "Lost in midair, with time sped up. No way to stop myself, it's too late." I think many people can interpret it in many different ways and that's why it is such a good poem! Overall, it liked it a lot!
I agree with Rockelle and Kelly. I really liked this poem because there are a loot of different meanings. When I first read through it I thought that it was about a person who was doing something like hanglidding or in a hot air balloon. But after I read it through I got the interpretation that it was about a girl who thought her world was slipping from underneath her, but then the girl saw that what she was going through wasn't that bad and that actaully her world was there all along. Therefore, this is a good poem because people can interpret it in a ton of different ways and that's what makes this poem unique.
I really liked this poem because it was about a topic that is not really often disscussed. You also use very good word choice in this poem which made it alot better. Therefore i really liked this poem because it is about a good topic.
I thought that this was a great poem because of the end. When I was reading it, I did not expect the final line. For example, at first I thought that it was about skydiving, because it was talking about falling most of the time, but then at the end, it was talking about how they were already on the ground. Now after reading it, I think it is about life and how fast it can sometimes go. Therefore, because it had a deeper meaning, it was wonderful!
I thought this poem was great as well. A good poem has multiple themes and different ways to interpret it. I thought of it as people worrying for nothing. For example in the beginning you said "Suspended in air, nowhere near the ground." and then at the end, it said that the ground was there the whole time, so the person was worrying for nothing. However, some people will interpret it differently. Therefore, because this poem had different themes and different ways to interpret it, it is a good poem.
I really liked this poem because it has a good theme. When it said, "...it was there the whole time," it made me realize that most people overthink things a lot and make so much more work for themselves than necassary. The poem clearly educates people to just calm down and take things one step at a time.
I liked this poem a lot. It uses good repetition for affect which really gets the point of the poem across. It also uses decent visual despriptions, but not great. Overall I liked poem and thought it had a great message to give to nearly everyone.
I agree with Rockelle, this poem had me thinking about a few things. I thought someone was hanging from something & scared to fall, I also thought that it could be a dream and they were scared to fall off of something. This is good because it makes people see it in different ways.
I also thought your poem was really good because of how easy it is to connect with it and there are many different ways someone could interpret it. By saying, "It was there the whole" everyone can connect to it because everyone has felt like they don't belong but later find out that they actually do once you stop stressing out. Some people can interpret that your poem mean someone was going to commit suicide or someone was sky diving or even a dream. Therefore this poem had very effective literature by having an universal theme and easy to interpret.
I thought this story was well written. it went over a topic that is rarely discussed. when i first read it i thought it was about someone skydiving, but as i reread it i thought it could have multiple reasons.therefore i thought this story was good because it kept the reader wondering.
This is a very well written poem. It made me think about many different topics. A good poem always makes people think. Also the theme in this poem is very strong. Saying that life is moving too quickly now and we cant live it to its fullest. Overall this peom was well written and had a stong theme. Nice job.
I liked this. It makes the reader think and visualize whats going on. The reader can interpret it in many different ways. When I read it i thought about some one parasailing. The last line was not how I expected it to end. It made me think even more. Overall, good job!
Like Caroline said, this poem was very visual so the reader could picture what is happening in their head. However, I liked this particular poem because, like others were saying, it could have many different meanings. For example, it could be a suicide attempt of jumping off a building or even just showing how some people are regretfull when it comes to different parts of their life. Either way though, it made me think which is the best quality a poem can have! Therefore, I loved all of the different meanings this poem could have towards life. Great job!!!
This poem was good. I had to read it a couple times to fully understand it. When I read it, it makes me think that the message was: Some people think that their problems are a lot bigger than what they really are. But then again, I could be completely wrong. This proves that this could be interpretted in many ways. Good job!!!
This poem was over all good because it could be interrperted many diferent ways. Reading everyones comments like Nicole's and Zach's are completely difrenet then eachothers and my own. I thought that it was taking from a scene where someone was living really high and then realized something that made her come back down to earth. Therefore it is good liteture because of the many diferent views it conveys.
I agree with jess that this poem could be interprrted inany different ways because it leaves the meaning open for interpretation. For example, in the poem it never really shows who the charactor is or what is happening. Instead it gives just enough imformation to make you think. Therefore this poem is great because it can be anythink you want it to be.
I think this was a very good poem because of the message it sent. For example, "No way to stop myself, it's too late. The ground comes to view, and appears underneath me. It was there the whole time." This is saying that she thought it was too late and she had no chance, but then she saw the ground and it was there the whole time. This is saying we move to fast in our lives and think its over when there is always something to fall on.
I liked this poem because it has a good reminder. The last line says, "It was there the whole time." I like this because sometimes we can all lose ourselves sometimes but through the whole event, we're still on the ground the whole time and have something to stand on. Therefore, I liked this becausse it has a good reminder.
I like this poem because I really had to read it a few times to really figure it out. Ted really pointed it out to me in his comment, and now I really like the purpose of the poem. He said that the ground was right under you the whole time, and was implying that it never goes away. Its always there, even if you think you are so far away from it. Originally, I thought it was only about being scared, but now I get it. Thanks Ted, and good poem even though its short.
I don't really get what is going on in the poem. Is it supposed to represent something? Ted did help me understand it a little bit more, that the ground is reliable and is always there. What I don't understand though is what is the ground supposed to represent?
As a lot of people said this was a great poem. It was written really well. There were definitely a few ways you could have interperated it but the way I did was that some people are very fearful. For example it says "suspended in air nowwhere near the ground" and then it says " it was there the whole time".This proves that some people are fearful.
This was a really nice poem. It was Short and easy to read. My favorite part of this poem was when you said ... "The ground comes to view, and appears underneath me. It was there the whole time." This verse/stanza kind of reminded me of a relationship about a guy and a girl and he was always waiting for her to come to him-or come back to him-and she never really noticed it until she was about to hit the ground with another relationship. That is why this poem reminds me of a relationship.
This is really good. I think that the ground is supposed to symbolize something bad. This is a really deep poem as well and it has alot of thought and meaning inside of it.
I think this is a good poem because its very symbolical. For example in the poem where it states,"The ground comes to view,and appears underneath me.It was there the whole time."There fore this shows that it symbolizes that sometime people forget thing or lose it.
This is really really good! I actually like the repetition of air in the poem and the message is good. It's saying that sometimes you are unbalanced and in your own little world...but the ground is solid and right below you.
I think this is pretty good and I like the message, BUT--the one thing I would change is the repeated use of the word air. To me it feels a little redundant.."air, air, midAIR,.." so just try to change it up a little bit.
ReplyDeletethis is a very good poem because when i first interpreted it i viewed it in alot of differenmt ways. is somebody hanggliding? on a plane? jumping off a building to commit suicide (probably not that but stil..) or maybe somebody died and is going up to heaven? great poems make people wonder what thje meaning of the poem is.
ReplyDeleteWow, I really like this poem because it had a very good theme! In the poem it says, "No way to stop myself,
ReplyDeleteit's too late.
The ground comes to view,
and appears underneath me.
It was there the whole time".
I think what you are trying to say with this piece, especially with the last line, is that sometime we may feel like everything is moving too fast, and we are just in free-fall, when really there will always be something to catch us if we look hard enough. Therefore, I liked this piece because it had a theme, which many poems written by our peers lack.
I really liked this poem! Like Rockelle said, this could mean a variety of different things. When I first read it, I thought it was someone jumping off of something and regretting it. For example, you said "Lost in midair,
ReplyDeletewith time sped up. No way to stop myself,
it's too late." I think many people can interpret it in many different ways and that's why it is such a good poem! Overall, it liked it a lot!
I agree with Rockelle and Kelly. I really liked this poem because there are a loot of different meanings. When I first read through it I thought that it was about a person who was doing something like hanglidding or in a hot air balloon. But after I read it through I got the interpretation that it was about a girl who thought her world was slipping from underneath her, but then the girl saw that what she was going through wasn't that bad and that actaully her world was there all along. Therefore, this is a good poem because people can interpret it in a ton of different ways and that's what makes this poem unique.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem because it was about a topic that is not really often disscussed. You also use very good word choice in this poem which made it alot better. Therefore i really liked this poem because it is about a good topic.
ReplyDeleteI thought that this was a great poem because of the end. When I was reading it, I did not expect the final line. For example, at first I thought that it was about skydiving, because it was talking about falling most of the time, but then at the end, it was talking about how they were already on the ground. Now after reading it, I think it is about life and how fast it can sometimes go. Therefore, because it had a deeper meaning, it was wonderful!
ReplyDeleteI thought this poem was great as well. A good poem has multiple themes and different ways to interpret it. I thought of it as people worrying for nothing. For example in the beginning you said "Suspended in air,
ReplyDeletenowhere near the ground." and then at the end, it said that the ground was there the whole time, so the person was worrying for nothing. However, some people will interpret it differently. Therefore, because this poem had different themes and different ways to interpret it, it is a good poem.
I really liked this poem because it has a good theme. When it said, "...it was there the whole time," it made me realize that most people overthink things a lot and make so much more work for themselves than necassary. The poem clearly educates people to just calm down and take things one step at a time.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem a lot. It uses good repetition for affect which really gets the point of the poem across. It also uses decent visual despriptions, but not great. Overall I liked poem and thought it had a great message to give to nearly everyone.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Rockelle, this poem had me thinking about a few things. I thought someone was hanging from something & scared to fall, I also thought that it could be a dream and they were scared to fall off of something. This is good because it makes people see it in different ways.
ReplyDeleteI also thought your poem was really good because of how easy it is to connect with it and there are many different ways someone could interpret it. By saying, "It was there the whole" everyone can connect to it because everyone has felt like they don't belong but later find out that they actually do once you stop stressing out. Some people can interpret that your poem mean someone was going to commit suicide or someone was sky diving or even a dream. Therefore this poem had very effective literature by having an universal theme and easy to interpret.
ReplyDeleteI thought this story was well written. it went over a topic that is rarely discussed. when i first read it i thought it was about someone skydiving, but as i reread it i thought it could have multiple reasons.therefore i thought this story was good because it kept the reader wondering.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very well written poem. It made me think about many different topics. A good poem always makes people think. Also the theme in this poem is very strong. Saying that life is moving too quickly now and we cant live it to its fullest. Overall this peom was well written and had a stong theme. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteI liked this. It makes the reader think and visualize whats going on. The reader can interpret it in many different ways. When I read it i thought about some one parasailing. The last line was not how I expected it to end. It made me think even more. Overall, good job!
ReplyDeleteLike Caroline said, this poem was very visual so the reader could picture what is happening in their head. However, I liked this particular poem because, like others were saying, it could have many different meanings. For example, it could be a suicide attempt of jumping off a building or even just showing how some people are regretfull when it comes to different parts of their life. Either way though, it made me think which is the best quality a poem can have! Therefore, I loved all of the different meanings this poem could have towards life. Great job!!!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was good. I had to read it a couple times to fully understand it. When I read it, it makes me think that the message was: Some people think that their problems are a lot bigger than what they really are. But then again, I could be completely wrong. This proves that this could be interpretted in many ways. Good job!!!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was over all good because it could be interrperted many diferent ways. Reading everyones comments like Nicole's and Zach's are completely difrenet then eachothers and my own. I thought that it was taking from a scene where someone was living really high and then realized something that made her come back down to earth. Therefore it is good liteture because of the many diferent views it conveys.
ReplyDeleteI agree with jess that this poem could be interprrted inany different ways because it leaves the meaning open for interpretation. For example, in the poem it never really shows who the charactor is or what is happening. Instead it gives just enough imformation to make you think. Therefore this poem is great because it can be anythink you want it to be.
ReplyDeleteI think this was a very good poem because of the message it sent. For example, "No way to stop myself,
ReplyDeleteit's too late.
The ground comes to view,
and appears underneath me.
It was there the whole time." This is saying that she thought it was too late and she had no chance, but then she saw the ground and it was there the whole time. This is saying we move to fast in our lives and think its over when there is always something to fall on.
I liked this poem because it has a good reminder. The last line says, "It was there the whole time." I like this because sometimes we can all lose ourselves sometimes but through the whole event, we're still on the ground the whole time and have something to stand on. Therefore, I liked this becausse it has a good reminder.
ReplyDeleteI like this poem because I really had to read it a few times to really figure it out. Ted really pointed it out to me in his comment, and now I really like the purpose of the poem. He said that the ground was right under you the whole time, and was implying that it never goes away. Its always there, even if you think you are so far away from it. Originally, I thought it was only about being scared, but now I get it. Thanks Ted, and good poem even though its short.
ReplyDeleteI don't really get what is going on in the poem. Is it supposed to represent something? Ted did help me understand it a little bit more, that the ground is reliable and is always there. What I don't understand though is what is the ground supposed to represent?
ReplyDeleteAs a lot of people said this was a great poem. It was written really well. There were definitely a few ways you could have interperated it but the way I did was that some people are very fearful. For example it says "suspended in air nowwhere near the ground" and then it says " it was there the whole time".This proves that some people are fearful.
ReplyDeleteThis was a really nice poem. It was Short and easy to read. My favorite part of this poem was when you said ...
ReplyDelete"The ground comes to view,
and appears underneath me.
It was there the whole time."
This verse/stanza kind of reminded me of a relationship about a guy and a girl and he was always waiting for her to come to him-or come back to him-and she never really noticed it until she was about to hit the ground with another relationship. That is why this poem reminds me of a relationship.
This is really good. I think that the ground is supposed to symbolize something bad. This is a really deep poem as well and it has alot of thought and meaning inside of it.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a good poem because its very symbolical. For example in the poem where it states,"The ground comes to view,and appears underneath me.It was there the whole time."There fore this shows that it symbolizes that sometime people forget thing or lose it.
ReplyDeleteThis is really really good! I actually like the repetition of air in the poem and the message is good. It's saying that sometimes you are unbalanced and in your own little world...but the ground is solid and right below you.
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