Buried deep inside memories,
they wait beside themselves,
Just to be rediscovered.
No one knows where they are,
or who chose to put them there.
The past is ripped open,
and the light floods back,
but still no one can see what’s broken
or what the truth really is.
While I really liked the imagery in the poem, which is really good, I was confused how in the first stanza it says, " they wait beside themselves." Are "they" people or the "truth" as in the second stanza?I can't figure it out, but I know it is important to the poem. Other than making the subjects unclear, the poem is really good!
ReplyDeleteI liked how in this poem your subject was 'they' so you never really told us who or what 'they' were. Well, that's at least what I liked about the first stanza. And then in the second stanza I really liked your lines "The past is ripped open and the light floods back". This just gives such an amazing image and a strong message of how the past is messed with and it ruins everything. (at least thats what i got)
ReplyDeleteThis was a great poem because of the imagery. For example, "The past is ripped open,
ReplyDeleteand the light floods back,
but still no one can see what’s broken
or what the truth really is." This whole stanza puts good images in my mind. I see a blank are ripped open into the sunshine and the light just powers through the rip. That is a very vivid image. Therefore, the imagery made this poem great.
This was a great poem because, like Matt said, it has great imagery. For example in the poem you stated, "The past is ripped open, and the light floods back." This image is great because i can see a dark room with light coming into it. Therefore, this poem was great! Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis was a great poem because of what three out of four people said, the imagery. I liked the first two lines of the second stanza, "The past is ripped open, and the light floods back." Even though its the same as kelly's example, I picture someone ripping a tarp open and light flooding in from the crack. Therefore, I liked this poem because I could picture a scene from two lines.
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