This was a good poem. You had some nice figurative language. However, I don't understand how the title relates to the poem. In the beginning of the poem you talk about how the petals take in the light and warmth from the sun and its a happy mood. Then the clouds come covering the sun and it starts to rain on them and the mood becomes dull. So how can they regret the warmth? It seems more like they are missing the warmth rather than regretting it. I might be wrong but it doesn't make much sense to me.
I liked this poem because it has a shift in the end. For example, in the beginning of the poem it is talking about warmth and happiness but in the end it talks about cloudiness and sadness/sorrow. Therefore, the shift that took place in this poem was good.
I liked this poem because of the figurative language and the shift in the poem. For example in the beginning of the poem you were talking about happiness involving the flower but by the end you were talking about sorrow and cloudiness surrounding the flower. Another thing I liked about your poem was how you added a simile that helped me to visualize what you were talking about in the poem. Therefore, I liked this poem because of the figurative language and the shift at the end of the poem.
When I read this poem, I thought the deeper meaning of it was about something that seemed really great at the time but then turned bad. However, when I read Caroline's response, I thought a little further and realized that it does seem like the flowers are missing the warmth, not regretting it. But besides that, you used great poetic device. For example, there were shifts, figurative language, and symbolism. You also showed, not told. “Over their petals the light falls, Warming them inside and out.” I like how you didn’t just say the sun was shining. Overall, you used great poetic techniques. The only other thing I would say is to make the meaning clearer.
I thought this poem was ok but could be improved because although it had some poetic device, it was not as detailed as I think it could be. For example, you had a great central image of flowers and then a storm but it could be expanded on with maybe more of the other things in nature that revolve around flowers and/or bad weather. Then, you could take those images and make them more with symbolism to match the tone you were going with. I don’t know, I just feel like it could be wonderful with s few adjustments, not that it’s not wonderful already but better. Therefore, it’s a good poem and I feel has potential to be great if added to a little.
This was a good poem. You had some nice figurative language. However, I don't understand how the title relates to the poem. In the beginning of the poem you talk about how the petals take in the light and warmth from the sun and its a happy mood. Then the clouds come covering the sun and it starts to rain on them and the mood becomes dull. So how can they regret the warmth? It seems more like they are missing the warmth rather than regretting it. I might be wrong but it doesn't make much sense to me.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem because it has a shift in the end. For example, in the beginning of the poem it is talking about warmth and happiness but in the end it talks about cloudiness and sadness/sorrow. Therefore, the shift that took place in this poem was good.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem because of the figurative language and the shift in the poem. For example in the beginning of the poem you were talking about happiness involving the flower but by the end you were talking about sorrow and cloudiness surrounding the flower. Another thing I liked about your poem was how you added a simile that helped me to visualize what you were talking about in the poem. Therefore, I liked this poem because of the figurative language and the shift at the end of the poem.
ReplyDeleteWhen I read this poem, I thought the deeper meaning of it was about something that seemed really great at the time but then turned bad. However, when I read Caroline's response, I thought a little further and realized that it does seem like the flowers are missing the warmth, not regretting it. But besides that, you used great poetic device. For example, there were shifts, figurative language, and symbolism. You also showed, not told. “Over their petals the light falls,
ReplyDeleteWarming them inside and out.” I like how you didn’t just say the sun was shining.
Overall, you used great poetic techniques. The only other thing I would say is to make the meaning clearer.
I thought this poem was ok but could be improved because although it had some poetic device, it was not as detailed as I think it could be. For example, you had a great central image of flowers and then a storm but it could be expanded on with maybe more of the other things in nature that revolve around flowers and/or bad weather. Then, you could take those images and make them more with symbolism to match the tone you were going with. I don’t know, I just feel like it could be wonderful with s few adjustments, not that it’s not wonderful already but better. Therefore, it’s a good poem and I feel has potential to be great if added to a little.
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