So quiet is the way you stand
The way I walk
The way you run
The way I chase
So quiet is your blood
The blood pumping through your veins
Becoming louder as your adrenaline pumps
So quiet is your defeat
My smile
The predator biting the prey
Your tears
So quiet is your struggling
Me draining you
You giving up and falling to the ground
So quiet is me disappearing into the shadows
Looking for a new victim
To repeat the process
So quiet
i like the vamp poem. but to make the poem have more rythm you could have the "so quiet" in a pattern, like every 4 lines you say "so quiet". it would make it flow more.
ReplyDeleteIt's really good, I can't think of how to make it any better, and it does flow better after kase's comment.
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