Wednesday, November 3, 2010

I Am King

The sun glistened like the clean gold in the room. The empty room I may add. The room was practically empty besides the throne the king sat on and a few gold statues of himself and the queen. There was an eerie silence in the room as if I have lost my hearing. I couldn’t understand why I was here, all I knew was I had to take over the throne and let nothing stop me.
The king stands up, removing his cloak and revealing a sword only a king would be worthy to hold. I stood there amazed and wondering where he could have gotten that from. He takes it out of his sheath and it hisses, almost like it was mocking me to attack.
I take out my own, worthless sword, dull as a slither of grass. I charge forward and scream at the king, challenging him to a game of life or death.
He stands up, accepting my challenge and casually starts walking toward me, while at the same time looking like a killer.
Our swords meet and I hear a clang as they clash. Then another as our swords meat for a second time. I dodge the third attack and thrust my dull sword toward his royal body. Weapon meats flesh and the king fall’s to the ground and screams out in pain. I ignore the pitiful cries for help and slide the sword out of him. I then victoriously finish him with one more thrust toward his heart. It lands with a sickening crunch and I know I have won.
I pick up the crown by the now dead body and place it on my head. It seems a little too big, but I figure I’ll grow into it eventually. I strut out the door of the castle with a cheerful smirk on my face. I have won, I am king.

3 comments:

  1. Nice story matt. Did you make the crown big purposely like he would have to grow into the king role?

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  2. Overall, it was a good story. I liked the simile involving the dull sword and the piece of grass. A question I had is that the fact that he knew he had to defeat the king is not completely believable.

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  3. Matt the first paragraph is explicit and reparative at first but the expanded moment at the end is really good. The battle scene is rushed and it almost defeats the purpose of having it. I think this a good idea and if used good literature techniques through out it and lengthened the story it could come out good.

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