Tuesday, November 2, 2010

Lost

Danielle Montague
9/22/10
The howling of wolves in the distance made shivers run down my spine. The sun is almost fully hidden, giving the sky streaks of orange and pink. I looked from left to right and saw nothing but the bare, pure, wilderness. Where was I? I remembered wandering along outskirts of the campground and suddenly a branch crashed down and knocked me out. I woke up and here I am, lost and confused. So for hours, I sat, waiting, watching. But then, suddenly in the distance I heard a snap of a twig and think I am finally rescued, but out of the shadows a large, bear showed himself. I froze, what do I do now? So I stood, frozen in that position. My heart skipped two beats as the bear came close and with a curious look, sniffed my hair. After what seemed like forever, it disappeared into the shadows of the trees. Relief washed over me and I hear a faint cry in the distance. As the yelling gets louder, not knowing what to expect, I hide behind a tree. Still, the yelling gets louder and I see a glow of light coming from the same direction as the yelling. It takes me a few moments to realize that these people are saying my name. I recognized their voices at once. It was my mom and brother. Without thinking I run up into them and give them a hug. Then, out of the shadows where he came, come the bear again with a hungry look in his eye. Without thinking, we all panic. The bear lunges at us, just missing my brother by a foot, tumbling to the ground. We start to run in the opposite direction, screaming for help, as I hear crashing foot steps behind us. Then we see another glow of light in the distance and realize it’s the other group of people searching for me. We head in that direction, hoping to get rid of the bear we reach the group and we warn them about the oncoming bear. Thankfully they knew their way out of the woods easily. We reach the edge of the woods and realize that the bear had given up. Finally, I was safe.

1 comment:

  1. I thought this story was okay. It was descriptive at parts, but I think that you could have elaborated more in other parts. Overall, I thought this was a very good, descriptive story.

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