Hannahmup,
I miss you so much it’s insane.
Everyday I walk up the driveway & to the stairs to the deck;
I would see your garden & rememeber that day we put you down.
It was probably the worst day ever.
Every time Dad teaches Marlow a new trick & one that you did perfect;
I would start to tear.
I miss having a dog,
that would sleep by my side at night.
I can’t believe it has almost been 3 months.
I miss you & I can’t
get a dog better then you.
R.I.P.
& I love you
I think that this is very good. It can make people relate to it. That's what I was thinking throughout this. I was thinking of my old dog.
ReplyDeleteI thought that this was also a very relatable piece. Also, I feel like it had a very strong tone and mood, which is sadness and loss. I think that you did a really great job portraying what you felt on the subject.
ReplyDeleteI thought this was really good. In made a good connection to people, if they have ever lost a pet or something in their life. This piece was also really strong in tone, which was sad. To make it better, I think you should try using figurative language. Good job. (:
ReplyDeleteAWWW! I love this piece so much! Probly becasue I can relate to it a lot. I love how you used sensery detials and really made the seen come to life. I also like how you made me feel what you felt. After reading this poem I started to cry and think about my dog that I had to put down because of cancer. :(
ReplyDeleteReally good job!