I struggle,
to understand the world,
and the ways of the people who inhabit it.
I can't even come to fathom,
the actions of the ones,
who are either,
to insecure for their own good,
or who just don't understand,
the meaning inside themselves.
They didn't all act that way,
the way they do now.
Infact,
many can't even come to the realization,
of their own actions preformed.
But they can't stop,
because once they have begun,
its a part of them,
that won't leave,
even to escape for a breath of fresh air.
I believe,
that only some will see clearly,
if the tables happen to turn,
or if they experience something,
even greater than their minds could imagine.
And for the others,
who know they won't and can't change,
are just lost.
L loved it but i don't see why you put commas after all the lines, i think it takes away fom the poem.
ReplyDeleteI don't know why I did it either, I just did!!!!
ReplyDeleteI loved it. You repetition was simple and had a great flow to it, but the only thing i would add is maybe some similes and metaphors so that you can relate to the feeling of lost to something in everyday life. other than that it was a great poem!
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