opposites attract
I walk alone. Not literally, im not that kid who is completely to themselves, but im alone. Me friends arent like me, ignoring all the problems of the world, because their too caught up in their perfect little world. I live a life of cold lonliness, home isnt fun, school isn't much better. Home is suupposed to be a safe place to be yourself, but i can't even be myself there. I'm trying to please my never-pleased parents, but..... they are never pleased!!! Sometimes i wonder, what the hell am i doing here, is the world better off without me? and sometimes i think it is. This doesn't stop me from waking up every morning with a new mentallity, every day is a fresh start, a new shot at the world. Maybe today will be better. Was it better? No, but maybe the next day will be.
My friends are who i like to hang out with, but their not the best friends anyone could ask for, to tell you the truth. They sometimes make fun of me for no reason, but maybe tommarrow they wont. My friends arent alot alike me, but i guess opposites attract.
My friends are who i like to hang out with, but their not the best friends anyone could ask for, to tell you the truth. They sometimes make fun of me for no reason, but maybe tommarrow they wont. My friends arent alot alike me, but i guess opposites attract.
If this story is true I noticed that it was a lot like mine. I definitely know how you feel with some of things you mentioned. Sometimes you just feel like no one understands you. I like your story but next time I think proof reading would really help.
ReplyDeleteI was thinking the same exact thing that kim said. I could connect it to her story. Besides for the spelling mistakes and the format, I thought it had really strong emotion and tone. I think it would help if you added some writing tricks. Overall, good job.
ReplyDeleteI thought this was a good story. You should check spelling errors before you post your story. Over all it was ok.
ReplyDeleteSometimes you have to stop thinking about what's wrong and what could happen, the hope of better life can not always take you forward. It is the joy you can find in the most tightest predicaments that should inspire the march on.
ReplyDeleteNice job, i liked it :)
I did notice this story was a lot like Kim's. It shows how you could feel alone but you still have friends. I would do spell check nxt time you post tho.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a really good emotional story, but if you used some similes or metaphors in it then that would make it better. I can relate to this poem, because honestly sometimes I ask myself why I'm even friends with certain people...and how different I am from them.
ReplyDeleteI didn't like this story that much because it didn't interest me since there was no discription in the way you wrote it. I thought that if you used some figurative language and some discription then it would have been a better story.
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