Baseball is America’s pastime.
Abner Doubleday invented it.
In Cooperstown, New York, the place where it all began.
At first they didn’t use a mitt.
Homeruns were rare and
there was a position on second base.
The first notable player was pitcher CY Young.
His fast ball was so fast you couldn’t see the lace.
Then came big boy bombing Babe Ruth who made a big Bang.
He hit a lot of Sky High hard-hit Homeruns.
Then some brave black broke baseball’s color-barrier.
His name was Jackie Robinson.
Hank Aaron was as strong as the golden gate bridge.
He broke Ruth’s homerun record.
Homeruns for him was watching T.V.
He’s baseball’s warlord.
Now Albert Pujols makes the crowd go, "Awe".
and A- Rod is like Babe.
There are new heroes now.
and the others start to fade.
I like this Poem with facts because it is short and to the point. This poem took me less than a minute to read but I enjoyed just as much as poems that take 10 minutes to read. If a poem is short it is encouraging to complete it and the best part of a poem is the ending. If this poem was longer I might have stopped before finishing it and probably would have disliked because i hadn't completed reading it. i also like that there are facts in it.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem because it gave a lot of information as well as figurative language. This poem would be boring and just a list of facts if you did not add the figurative language. It was good that you included both. "Hank Aaron was as strong as the golden gate bridge." This was an example of a good simile and it made the poem more effective and descriptive. It also included a fact. Both information and figurative language make this poem more appealing to readers and interesting. Therefore, I thought this poem was good.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was intresting to read because it has good writing elements and there is creativity. The one thing that caught my eye when I read it was the alleteration of "brave black broke baseball’s color-barrier." That helped it flow good, and I also liked how it was like a timeline starting with the beginning and ending with Pujols and A-rod. Therefore, the creativity in this poem makes it fun to read. It also is on a good topic. The only con was that there wasn't any transition words between lines.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is good for baseball fans because it gives people historical baseball facts in a short, little poem. One example of this is when you mentioned who invented baseball,"Abner Doubleday invented it.In Cooperstown, New York, the place where it all began." Also, the poem flows well. Like George said the poem went like a time line. From Abner Doubleday, who invented baseball, to Albert Pujols who is one of the best players right now (I know you didnt say that its an example using my opinion). With the historical facts and smooth flow of the poem, this is a good poem for all baseball fans.
ReplyDeleteI think this poem is great because it shows the history of baseball.For example in the poem it states that,"Then some brave black broke baseball’s color-barrier.His name was Jackie Robinson."Which is historical because thats when they alowed blacks to play baseball when jackie robinson began to play. Therefore this poem show you the history if baseball because jackie robson broke the racial barrir in the mlb which was remarkable.
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