corners, turns, changes in all
full of hope and fears and chances to fall
how does everyone just openly melt and remold
when the unknown has a possibility of being so cold
leaps of faith and all those cliches
have never been something more then i say
they are words that are tossed around here and there
but never set into action, i wouldn't dare
they tell you not to gamble
to like what you got
but at one point or another everything stops
you get to the breaking point you never thought you would see
where i just cant take what has become of you and me
change is everywhere except with your habits
they repeat and repeat like the song in my head
stuck to you like gum, to bad its not in and out like the things that i've said
no more chances no more trys
its me or that pack; im done with all the fears and the lies
I liked this poem, Jess! I liked it mostly because of the repition and rhyming. For example: "corners, turns, changes in all
ReplyDeletefull of hope and fears and chances to fall
how does everyone just openly melt and remold
when the unknown has a possibility of being so cold" This shows that the first two lines rhyme with each other, then the second two and so on. Using repition makes the story flow and be more effective. Therefore, I thought this was good poem.
repetition*
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