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Wednesday, January 19, 2011
Forever And Always
I was there when you said you would never leave me. I was there when you said you loved me. But look where we are now. I don't know who you are anymore. You're not the person I fell head over heels for. I used to think you meant it when you told me I was yours forever. I used to think you meant it when you said you would stay by my side forever. But everything's different now, it's all different. Everything's changed. It's been four months now. Four long, depressing, cold, bitter months where all I did was think about you and how we should be together again. You don't know how much it hurts me to think that you said I would never be alone. I guess you figured our story was a fairytale. The one perfect fairytale where we lived happily ever after, and we were together until the end of the world. But this is reality. Reality where fairytales don't often come true. But I thought we would be something more than what we were. I thought we were much more than that. Much more than "I love you". But it turns out, we were nothing special. We were just something that comes and goes. I used to often think we shared something no one else shared. I used to think that people would want to have what we had, but I was wrong. We had what every other person in love had. Sparks flew when we were together. Our hearts never stopped beating for each other.The bond we shared was unbearable. Nobody could've had what we shared. But that day came around. The day where you left me standing in the pouring rain, telling me you were leaving. A crack started to form right down the middle of my heart, as if it were going to shatter into pieces right at that very moment. I was standing there, drenched in rain, and tears, watching you drive away. It almost felt like knives peircing through my stomach as I watched your car fade away in the distance. I feared that day would come, but I didn't think it would come that soon. It seems like it was just yesterday when that day arrived. But like I said, it's been four months. I don't think you realize how much you hurt me when you said your last goodbye. So, I'll watch your life go on, as I sit here and think about you. And I'll keep in touch with your friends and family, to see how you are. And I hope it's nice where you are, but please, please, rememeber me.. as your one and only true love. Forever will you be in my heart, and always will you be on my mind.
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This was a really cute story, something most girls would relate to. The only thing was the sentences were a little choppy, other wise i liked it.
ReplyDeleteThank you!And I tend to make my sentences choppy, which needs improvement. But thanks again!:)
ReplyDeleteThis was good, a lot of emotions. I could really picture when you said, "The day where you left me standing in the pouring rain, telling me you were leaving. A crack started to form right down the middle of my heart, as if it were going to shatter into pieces right at that very moment. I was standing there, drenched in rain, and tears, watching you drive away." Like what Georgina said, the sentences were a little choppy. But that could be easily fixed. I like how you ended with using the title.
ReplyDeleteThis was so good! I felt like I was the main character in this because of how well you described each and every emotion! I also really liked how you used the repetition for effect writing trick alot, like "i used to" and "I was there" I also thought it was really relatable, like Georgina said. I really liked it!
ReplyDeleteLike everyone else mentioned, this was a really good story! I like how you used the repeption of "I used to" and "I was there". The ending was really creative when you interpreted the use of the title in to the clincher. It was very crafty. I also like how it related to the song "Forever and Always" by Taylor Swift. It wasn't like the whole story was exactly the same, but it related on the level of a girl who thought her love would last but it only ended sadly and it broke her heart.
ReplyDeleteThis was so good Abb, and it was really easy to relate to. I know how you feel and I think most girls do. Hahah but again I really enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone! And yeah, Anna. I was listening to the song while I was writing this, because I absolutely love Taylor Swift:)
ReplyDeleteThis is a great piece of writing because i thought it was easy for most people to connect to and it was universal. You took the struggles of everyday life and put them into your poem. Thats why this piece is a 5/5.
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