Life is but a mere dream made by on angel,their dreams vivid and clear.
they dream of what they hold dear,or what they fear.
so what happens when they wake up?
Life is not more than what was imagined by angel, or is it more?
if this is true then those angels are sick, making it so that finding food or shelter is a chore.
so what happens when they wake up?
Does life end or does it just began?
do the problems go away or just stay?
much to find out when they wake up.
feed back please
ReplyDeleteI thought it was good because it flowed nicely therefore it was a good poem
ReplyDeleteI think the concept of the poem was really cool. I've never thought of it that way....great job :)
ReplyDeleteKishan I think your poem is well written because you ask alot of questions that make me think. An example of this would be when you say,"Does life end or does it just began?" witch makes me think does life realy end or begin?. Therefore this shows that this peace is well written because you ask alot of questions that make me think as seen in the example.
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