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Sunday, January 30, 2011
No help
Through dark eyes everyone can see difference, depression, regret. Through my dark eyes I can see torture, lonliness, scars. Through their dark eyes they can see hate, hostility, suicide.
This was a really good poem! I like it because it shows how everyone can have a different outlook on someone, but their outlook can differ from the person they are judging. I also like how there is very little writting, but I feel like there is so much more meaning than there is writing. Good job.
I really liked this poem Grace! I liked it a lot because of the use of repetition. For example, you said, "Through ___ dark eyes ___ can see" every 4 stanzas. Therefore, the repetition was good because that repeted line was spread out very well with strong words in between. It was also very deep and intense which is alwasy good!
I really liked this poem because you changed the point of view every time you said through _____ dark eyes _____ can see.... This really made the poem more interesting because it made me think what other people this about someone. Therefor changing the point of view is a really good idea.
This was a really good poem! I like it because it shows how everyone can have a different outlook on someone, but their outlook can differ from the person they are judging. I also like how there is very little writting, but I feel like there is so much more meaning than there is writing. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI thaought this story was depresing because it talks about hatred and suecide. I was a very good poem though.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem Grace! I liked it a lot because of the use of repetition. For example, you said, "Through ___ dark eyes ___ can see" every 4 stanzas. Therefore, the repetition was good because that repeted line was spread out very well with strong words in between. It was also very deep and intense which is alwasy good!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem because you changed the point of view every time you said through _____ dark eyes _____ can see.... This really made the poem more interesting because it made me think what other people this about someone. Therefor changing the point of view is a really good idea.
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