Wednesday, January 26, 2011
No Turning Back
The silence lingers as I feel all eyes on me. They're waiting for me to speak, but I am at a loss for words. But no words could possibly save me now. I'm cornered, and they are closing in, a pack of lions on their prey. All exits are blocked, all means of escape have vanished. Doom grows closer and closer, but have I not brought this on myself? Have I not dug myself into this hole? Signs along the way have warned me to stray but I have blantantly ignored them. My ignorance has blinded me from all meant to help, and I have only chosen the darker path. Now, drowning in my own troubles, I realize there is no turning back.
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This is good literature because it has many tangible and intangibles. A pack of lions and escapes vanishing represent the intangible things going on in this story. it is important to have Tangibles to show in intangible things because the reader cannot actually comprehend something intangible but just relate it to a lot of things that are tangible. If these relations are not made for the reader the reader will be confused and the piece of literature will not be good literature.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this because of the figurative language and description throughout this paragraph. For example "I was drowning in my own troubles" was a great use of figurative language. The only thing I would say to improve on would be to use more intangible things to make the story more interesting and maybe make the story a little bit longer. Overall great job.
ReplyDeleteI loved this piece because it was one big exploded moment, full of great word choice and figurative language. It says, "I'm cornered, and they are closing in, a pack of lions on their prey. All exits are blocked, all means of escape have vanished. Doom grows closer and closer, but have I not brought this on myself?" Just these few sentences have a metaphor, good word choice, and personification. Therefore, this was an effective paragraph because a lot different writing tricks were used at once to add interest to it.
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