Peer Pressure,
Awful experience,
Don’t know what to do,
Can’t think straight,
Excuses,
Everybody’s doing it,
Say yes or no,
Being on the right side when it’s over,
Friends think you’re loyal,
Are they really your friends?
Think they know you but don’t,
Everyday experience
“I dare you to”,
Peer Pressure
This is not convincing because it doesn't use any repetition. There is no repetition in this poem. Without any repetition it may be difficult for your reader to separate the main idea from the sub ideas, details, and evidence. This means it can be hard to convince or show your reader the main idea because they cannot sort through the vast abyss of words.
ReplyDeleteThis poem seems like you made it up in thirty seconds because you didnt have any rythem to it. You had no ryhming to it and like david there was no repitation to it. It was also very boring since it was very plain and has the writing skills of a second grader (no offense). Therefore this poem didnt get my attention and bored me half way through it.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a good rough draft of a great final poem because this is a highly relatable poem to many people in middle school. However, like Matt said, it seems like this poem was rushed and you could make it better with some alliteration/rhyming because it would create more flow to the piece. Therefore, the theme is strong, however, the poem needs improvement to flow more.
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