Monday, January 24, 2011

Sadness

Sadness is like a dead sea.

It looks like a dark blue sky

and smells like dead flowers.

Sadness sounds like wimpering dogs.

It tastes like a bitter peace of candy.

Sadness makes me feel like crying.

3 comments:

  1. This poem is good but it seems to simple and very easy to understand, even though that's a good thing it can also be a bad thing, having something come right out without having a reader wonder or get them asking themselves questions is just to far out there, but overall good job.

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  2. yeah I agree with ^^^^ because you have good images in this poem but they are too out there. Even taking out the "is like.."'s and replacing it with just "is" (like 'Sadness is a dead sea') would make it that much better, You can do more to show instead of tell, but ya this poem is pretty good!

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  3. you could have been more deep and used better symbolism, but you did a good job of describing how you felt.

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