This poem is good but it seems to simple and very easy to understand, even though that's a good thing it can also be a bad thing, having something come right out without having a reader wonder or get them asking themselves questions is just to far out there, but overall good job.
yeah I agree with ^^^^ because you have good images in this poem but they are too out there. Even taking out the "is like.."'s and replacing it with just "is" (like 'Sadness is a dead sea') would make it that much better, You can do more to show instead of tell, but ya this poem is pretty good!
This poem is good but it seems to simple and very easy to understand, even though that's a good thing it can also be a bad thing, having something come right out without having a reader wonder or get them asking themselves questions is just to far out there, but overall good job.
ReplyDeleteyeah I agree with ^^^^ because you have good images in this poem but they are too out there. Even taking out the "is like.."'s and replacing it with just "is" (like 'Sadness is a dead sea') would make it that much better, You can do more to show instead of tell, but ya this poem is pretty good!
ReplyDeleteyou could have been more deep and used better symbolism, but you did a good job of describing how you felt.
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