I miss…
The old days;
The nights you two would come in my room and tuck me in at night
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we would sing together.
I miss the day I took my first steps
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my sisters were there to cheer me on,
I miss the day I jumped off the bus
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saw my baby in Lauren’s arms.
I miss the day that we were actually friends
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we would have fun togther.
I especially miss the day when you told us you loved us
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we were the best thing that happened to you.
I miss those days,
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I want them back.
I can really relate to this and I'm sure that a lot of other people can too. I liked the way that you used I miss _____ to start every line. There was a lot of emotion in this and I really like it. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI thought that this was an amazing poem. Like Kaitlyn said, I can really relate to most of what this said. My favorite parts about this poem and all of your others are when you italicize or bold certain words to emphasize them. I think that it helps to give the poem a little bit more voice.
ReplyDeleteI also thought the use of repetition was very well used and gave a great tone of saddens which made it easy to connect to. Also I thought it was great how you organized like a timeline going to when you were young to now.
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