I will fly away.
My heart will escape from the steel cages, the misguided thoughts, the unforgiving glares, the fake talking.
My ears wont hear the snide remarks, the snippy answers.
My eyes wont see the hostile backs, the quickly closed doors.
My mouth wont grace the angry masses with its words.
My mind wont comprehend the anxious glances, the tense tones.
I will fly away.
I will break free.
I will find a life free of this madness.
this is the repeation piece i did on thrusday. i like to think the tone is determined, what do you think?
ReplyDeleteI agree with you, I also think that the tone is detrmined . You did a great job yet again with your writing piece. You are a very good writer and should do it more often :)
ReplyDeleteGREAT JOB
I also think you did a great job of showing determination in your poem. You did a great job writing this and I like the meaning. Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteThis is definitely repitition for effect and the tone is determined. I also like how you change the repition to "I will" at the end to match the first sentence in the beginning. The tone was strong and I thought this was great!
ReplyDeletei really liked this! great use of repetition. i agree with bella i also liked that you changed it to "i will". overall good job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was definetly repition for effect and the tone was determined. You did a great job writing this, and the meaning was very strong. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem. It is short, but brilliant, simple, but deep. It kind of reminds me of individual vs society.
ReplyDeleteYet again you do a fantastic job. From the creative title to the last line you had me hooked. I agree that the tone is determined the character has its mind set on one thing escaping, a job well done.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing piece. I like the repition you put in it with My and I will. Yeah, i think you will be a great writer in poetry and stories. Keep writing. I can assume what you get on Mr. Horvath's essays!
ReplyDeleteI really like the repeptition in your poem and how it states in a cool way that sometimes, people just have to let go of all the drama, rejection and hatred that life brings and just break free. It gave a cool message and overall I liked it!
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem. There is good repetition that represents the author`s emotions.I liked the message it sent to the reader`s. It was very good.
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