The boy walks down the halls, people staring from every direction.
He keeps walking.
Some funny kid decides to stick out his foot and trip the boy.
He picks up his books and keeps walking.
Taunts and jokes arise from each and every mouth.
He shuts it out and keeps walking.
He finds his friends at the end of the hall, and they walk away together.
Remember, you're never Alone.
Great message. I liked the message in the poem because its universal and most people can connect to it. Also, maybe you could have used some imagery but other than that it was a great poem.
ReplyDeleteLike Luke said ^ You had a really great theme in your poem but, it would've been better if you elaborated a little more. You could've described a little more and you could've added a little more imagery, like what the main character was feeling or looked like. It would've added to your theme. Overall, it was a good poem.
ReplyDeleteMkay, I will say, heartwarming theme. But! This poem is cliche. I don't mean to be mean, I just try to speak the truth. Without interesting imagery this is just yet another bland bullying poem. Because this theme has been written over and over you need to be very orginal in order to make it good.
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