Tuesday, June 14, 2011

I QUIT

They tell her that
she needs to clean this
or do that

They tell her she is
not good enough
or useless

They tell her that she is
wrong and stupid
or does not do anything their way

Well, all she has to say is
I QUIT!!

2 comments:

  1. I think that this poem is good but it leaves the reader hanging a little bit to far off the edge. It was done with the lines, "Well, all she has to say is I QUIT!!". I found this too unexplained because I would like to know if she ever does quit or she continues to let them abuse her and command her to do things.

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  2. I am not really getting a clear message out of this poem. I would suggest figurative language and especially imagery. This would make it more visual and more dramatic. I think that those two things are the key to this poem. They would make it ten times better than it is now. Therefore, by adding these in, would give the good and clear message that the reader is looking for.

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