When the makeup got heavier
When the skirt got shorter
When the tank top got tighter
Regret
When the true friends dissapeared
When the fake friends came along
When the hatred soon began
Regret
When the grades went down
When the sympathy vanished
When she changed in an instant
Regret
I liked your idea and I thought it was intersting to see the things that the person regreted. I like the line "When the true friends dissapeared, When the fake friends came along". i like this line because it shows that when the true friends are gone you are left with only fake friends and that is something to regret.
ReplyDeleteI liked your repetition in this poem of regret and it's showing how you wish you could change what you did in the past. I like the line,"When the true friends dissapeared." This is a good line because it is showing that you miss those good friends of yours and they are the real ones who stayed with you all the way. Therefore, I can tell now what the theme of this poem is and how someone really can regret the mistakes that this person did in the past.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem because you had good repetition for effect. This helped me better understand what you were trying to say in your poem. Therefore, this was an effective piece of literature.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem! It is definitely something that most people can relate to personally. I also liked your repetition of the word regret. It added intensity to the poem. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was really good! Your repetition definitely was effective when you repeated the word "Regret" after you said three things that had happened.And also it was good how you made your poem something that many people can relate to in middle school or high school, with things like friendships. Good job!
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