Wednesday, June 15, 2011

Nothing Noticed

The perfect porcelain skin glows,
The golden luscious hair sits neatly,
The bright smile widens
On the outside

The blue eyes sparkle
The stomach lays symmetrical
The long legs stretch
On the outside

But the outside is one thing

The passion pulses
The strength fulfills
The confidence glistens
On the inside

The bravery overpowers
The intelligence conquers
The humor attracts
On the inside

And the inside is another
Another apperance,
No one ever
Bothers to notice

2 comments:

  1. I really liked this poem because you had good imagery. For example, "The gold luscious hair sits neatly". When you said that, along with other lines, I was able to picture your poem much better. Therefore you did a good job!

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  2. This poem had great detail in it. One example was when you said, "The golden luscious hair sits neatly," And that made the poem really easy to read and picture. Having great detail is what makes every piece of writing a good piece of writing.

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