Wednesday, April 13, 2011

Drama

Everywhere you go

Where ever you see

You can't escape it

It's like and addiction

You can't control it

It's like a weed

You can't tame it

Like a tree

It never stops growing

Like a broken record

There's never an end

Until 2012

When the world ends.

4 comments:

  1. This was a really cute poem. I loved the rhyming. My favorite part would be
    " You can't escape it

    It's like and addiction

    You can't control it

    It's like a weed

    You can't tame it

    Like a tree

    It never stops growing"
    Overall, I liked your poem lily! Keep it up.

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  2. I also really liked this poem because of how you kept referring to plants like weeds and trees. If you related all of your lines to something in nature it might make it better but it was still really good and very clever. Also, like Georgina said, I liked how you kept making it rhyme.

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  3. I really liked this poem because how easy it is to relate to it, and just the way you stated everything was interesting and I really enjoyed it. You kinda scared me about the world ending, but other than that, good job Lily!

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  4. This was really good but I feel that you could have explained more. For example, I think that some of the lines end too quickly. One of these would be, "It's like a weed..." Right here, I feel like you could have expanded it more. Other than that though I thought it was ok. Therefore this poem could be improved if wanted but well done.

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