Life is like a pair of shoes.
We dont like change.
We like being able to slip on our comfortable, warn out, formfitted shoes.
We like knowing that life is the same and that nothing changed.
We liked being able to go back to our shoes that got us through everything when life got hard.
We like having that one safe thing.
Life is like a pair of shoes...
sometimes made fun of, laughed at, and judged just by the outside.
Life is like a pair of shoes.
This is really good because it is a good connection. It had a good clincher. Life is made fun of and judged just like someones shoes sometimes. There is a good message in this. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem because you say something about shoes and then you connect it back to a humans life. I also really like the ending because it brought the whole poem together.
ReplyDeleteThanks guys, I actually also really like this poem because I connected two very different things. It probably could have been better but thats okay.
ReplyDeleteI also like this poem! I like that it's short and simple but sends a good message. I also love how you compared life to shoes. It was an excellent idea. One line that I absolutely love is when Colleen said, "We like having that one safe thing." I like this line because it is so true. Everyone has that one person that they feel keeps them safe and that they love. Great job twine :)
ReplyDeleteI think this poem was very good because of the connection. For example, "Life is like a pair of shoes..." This is a great connection because it symbolizes how shoes are always there and will not change, just like how we do not like change in our lives. Therefore, the great connection made this poem great.
ReplyDeleteThis was a really good poem! I liked how it connected to soomething so much like it! There was so much between these two things that are the same and they were all in the poem! Also, it had a good clincher and nice repetition for effect!
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem because of the repetition. You said, "Life is like a pair of shoes," at the beginning and at the end of the poem which reinforces the idea. Since you were firm in your message, the poem turned out really good!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem because it is all one big simile, however, the only criticism I do have is that some of the comparisons you made about shoes and life seemed invalid to me. In the poem you stated, "We liked being able to go back to our shoes that got us through everything when life got hard. We like having that one safe thing." I understand what you are trying to say, but to be honest, if I had to choose one thing in my life that was always there to comfort me when life got hard, it would not be my shoes. Also, in the poem you talk about going back to that one pair of shoes, and not liking change, but in reality, don’t most of us like to trade in our older shoes to newer and better ones, that match the current style at the time? Therefore, I did like the whole idea, don’t get me wrong, but I did feel that some of the comparisons were invalid and did not make sense.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem because it compared two completely different things, shoes and life. When the poem stated,"We like knowing that life is the same and that nothing changed." it shows that when everything has changed, life will never. Therefore, I liked how this poem compared life an shoes.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem and thought it was good because it had repititon. In the beggining i thought that being safe is in your home, when your young and you have somebody to take care of you,your mom or dad. And that you dont want a new pair of shoes because you dont want things to change. You always want to be safe. But in the end i think it meant something differnt, that still is related to life.
ReplyDelete"life is like a pair of shoes" is a pretty good simile and in your poem you back that statement up with some pretty good evidence. However, the one thing that doesn't make sense is that once you outgrow your shoes, you toss them and get a new pair. If you outgrow "life" you cant toss "life" and get a new pair which is why your simile doesn't really make too much sense in that aspect.
ReplyDeleteI like this poem a lot because of the strong connection. You connected life being like shoes which is very creative, but also you made it strong. For example, "Life is like a pair of shoes...sometimes made fun of, laughed at, and judged just by the outside." This shows how stong the connection between life and shoes you made. Therefore, because of the strong connection, I like this poem a lot. Nice Job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a terrific piece because you used a great connection between life and shoes. My favorite connection between the two was,
ReplyDelete"Life is like a pair of shoes...
sometimes made fun of, laughed at, and judged just by the outside."
I liked this connection the most because I think it means the most! Therefore, this poem caught my eye because of the two things you used to connect.
This was an extrordinary poem! Firstly, because of the way you connected a tangible object and an un-tangible thing, shoes and life. Also, it was very easy to connect to, i suspect that many people don't want change in their life, just safety and routine. This quote, "We like knowing that life is the same and that nothing changed," completely proves my point about the connectivity. Therefore, because of your connection between shoes and life and the overall connectivity of the story, then this is an amazing poem.
ReplyDeleteyou did a good job of using similes to make this poem effective. good job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was really good because it was relatable. Almost everyone can relate to it. For example in the poem it said, "We like having that one safe thing." This is relatable because almost everyone has someone or something that makes them feel safe. Therefore, this was a great poem! Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem because of the imagery. You used a pair of shoes to connect life to us and how it is very similar. The imagery made the poem easy to relate to and understand. Everyone can now connect to it because of the good imagery. Therefore, this was a good poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem because of how you connected life, to a pair of shoes! These are two very different things, but you made me realize the similarities between them. For example, you said,"Life is like a pair of shoes...
ReplyDeletesometimes made fun of, laughed at, and judged just by the outside."
Therefore, it made this poem more interesting to me because you did a good job of connecting two different things to each other.