Monday, April 11, 2011

Life

I'm trapped and life won’t let me out

I’ll fight to keep it going now

My head won’t stop spinning around

Soon it will all be going down

But we can only fight so hard

And we can only live so long

We should live it up right now

Before it’s all gone

3 comments:

  1. this is a good poem, i like how even though none of the words rhyme it seems like they do. Also this poem has a good meaning, that we should live life to the fullest before its gone. And its not a confusing poem where you have to really, really think to come up with the meaning which i like. good job luke

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  2. I think this poem was really good. I do get the meaning of it. Yeah, the words do not rhyme, but they sound like they do. This poem is telling me that life can become hard on you, but you can fight it out and keep your head on straight. Therefore, this poem is using some kind of device which is rhyming, and makes the poem more enjoyable to read.

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  3. I like this poem because it has a good meaning. It's saying you should always live life to the fullest and even when life is hard, to keep your head held high. Also, the words sound good together. Therefore, this poem is good writing because it has a strong meaning that makes the piece more enjoyable to read. Good job!

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