Wednesday, April 13, 2011
Our World Could Be A Better Place
Once people realize what the world is Then maybe we’ll stop fighting. Once people realize how we are treating the world Then maybe we’ll help the needy. Once people realize which is better-peace or fighting Then maybe our world could be a better place. Once people start caring Then maybe everyone will stop crying. Once people start helping Then maybe Africa can thrive. Once people start careing and helping Then maybe our world could be a better place. Just maybe our world could be a better place.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
This meant to come out as stanzas sorry
ReplyDeleteI think this is a good poem because has a good theme and good flow. The poem has a good theme with how it is saying that if we can all just get along, the world would be so much better. This poem also has a good flow to it because almost every line has a statement that sounds similar like "Once people realize what the world is Then maybe we’ll stop fighting" and "Once people realize how we are treating the world Then maybe we’ll help the needy." Therefore, this poem has a good theme to it and the flow is nice so this poem is great.
ReplyDelete