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Saturday, April 9, 2011
Our Planet
I stepped outside and inhaled the warm summer air as I glanced around my neighborhood. The grass on the people's yards was greener than you could ever imagine. I noticed how the flowers were in perfect places around the yard- enough to get your attention. I started to walk down the narrow street, which was a narrow strip of gravel. I kicked the rocks as I walked along, admiring the fact that they bounced fifty feet with every kick. Then, I came across something I had never noticed before. There was a house the size of a peanut with flowers that were sticks with wet leaves dangling from the top. The barley there grass was yellow and unhealthy. If I had the gumption, I would have knocked on his door and told him to clean it up and make it look like it was alive. I walked away, thinking how someone could leave their yard looking like his does.
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This story was good because it had a lot of figurative language. This made the story interesting. I also like how you took a small moment and expanded it and made it interesting.
ReplyDeleteI personally like this story because the description clearly shows the whole point. The positive and happy thoughts that the character has illustrates that the person is eco-friendly and loves Earth. Then, the fact that he/she did not have the guts to confront the homeowner shows that he/she is shy. So, the details in the story clearly told me a universal point that some "green" people are not very assertive.
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